《Travel by plane》As far as we know,traveling by plane is very enjoyable and fantastic,but it is a little expensive and dangerous,Someone maybe afraid of by plane,they feel scard when they are in the sky,because it is too high.But from my point of

《Travel by plane》As far as we know,traveling by plane is very enjoyable and fantastic,but it is a little expensive and dangerous,Someone maybe afraid of by plane,they feel scard when they are in the sky,because it is too high.But from my point of
《Travel by plane》
As far as we know,traveling by plane is very enjoyable and fantastic,but it is a little expensive and dangerous,Someone maybe afraid of by plane,they feel scard when they are in the sky,because it is too high.But from my point of view,I like traveling by plane,because it make me feel comfortable and relaxing.Can you image that when you look out the window,the sky is beautiful,it as blue as sea.The cloud is as white as milk,very lovely .Sometimes you can see birds flying in the sky.How beautiful the view is!What a amazing traveling!That's why I like traveling by plane,it is my favourite trasport.
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《Travel by plane》As far as we know,traveling by plane is very enjoyable and fantastic,but it is a little expensive and dangerous,Someone maybe afraid of by plane,they feel scard when they are in the sky,because it is too high.But from my point of
第二行 Some people may be afraid of traveling by plane.
someone 变成 some people
maybe 分开写
of by plane 是不可以的, 可以是 of traveling by plane 或 of taking the plane
第三行 because it makes me make 用第三人称单数
第四行 and relaxed. 感觉放松的 relaxed, relaxing 是（某物）使人放松的
Can you image.这句话,像下面这样改,可能会更优美：
Try to imagine this, when you look out of the window, you can see the beautiful sky in touching distance, it is as blue as the sea, and the clouds are as white as milk. How lovely it is!
第六行 What an amazing way of traveling!
最后一句话 It's my favorite transportation.

As far as we know，traveling by plane is very enjoyable and fantastic，but it is a little expensive and dangerous,Someone maybe afraid of by plane，they feel scard when they are in the sky，because it is ...

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As far as we know，traveling by plane is very enjoyable and fantastic，but it is a little expensive and dangerous,Someone maybe afraid of by plane，they feel scard when they are in the sky，because it is too high.But from my point of view，I like traveling by plane，because it make（应该是makes) me feel comfortable and relaxing.Can you image that when you look out the window，the sky is beautiful，it as blue as sea.The cloud is as white as milk，very lovely .Sometimes you can see birds flying in the sky. How beautiful the view is！What a amazing traveling！That's why I like traveling by plane，it is my favourite trasport.
就一处错误，写的很好

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据我们所知，坐飞机旅行是非常愉快的和奇妙的，但是有点昂贵的和危险的，有些人可能害怕坐飞机，他们感到害怕的时候，他们在天空中，因为它太高了。但从我的角度来看，我喜欢乘飞机旅行，因为它使我感到舒适和放松。你能想象，当你看窗外，天空是美丽的，它像海一样的蓝。云是乳白色的，非常可爱。有时你可以看到鸟儿在天空中飞翔。看来是多么美丽啊！多么令人惊异的旅行！这就是为什么我喜欢乘飞机旅行，这是我最喜欢的交通。 <...

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据我们所知，坐飞机旅行是非常愉快的和奇妙的，但是有点昂贵的和危险的，有些人可能害怕坐飞机，他们感到害怕的时候，他们在天空中，因为它太高了。但从我的角度来看，我喜欢乘飞机旅行，因为它使我感到舒适和放松。你能想象，当你看窗外，天空是美丽的，它像海一样的蓝。云是乳白色的，非常可爱。有时你可以看到鸟儿在天空中飞翔。看来是多么美丽啊！多么令人惊异的旅行！这就是为什么我喜欢乘飞机旅行，这是我最喜欢的交通。
没有啥错误的。希望得到楼主釆纳!谢谢！

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