请帮我改一篇TOEFL作文 Do parents serve as the most becoming teachers?Some people hold the opinion that the milieu a child live in can truly learn something from experiences.I concede their sentiment.Nevertheless,from my perspective,children l

请帮我改一篇TOEFL作文 Do parents serve as the most becoming teachers?Some people hold the opinion that the milieu a child live in can truly learn something from experiences.I concede their sentiment.Nevertheless,from my perspective,children l
请帮我改一篇TOEFL作文
Do parents serve as the most becoming teachers?Some people hold the opinion that the milieu a child live in can truly learn something from experiences.I concede their sentiment.Nevertheless,from my perspective,children learn more from their parents and parents are the best teachers.
Individually speaking,I get a lot from my parents and I always think they act as my models.Deeply respected by me,my father suffices for a gratifying example for me.When I was a little girl,I consider my father to be the superlative man in the world and his did influence me on every aspect.For instance,my father always impressed the significance of studying on me and he set an example.At the age of 34,after graduating from a university and worked for many years,he prepared to attend an examination to further his education and get his master degree.Although he hasn’t touched some academic books for years,he did his utmost to study.I will never forget the moment when I wake up in the midnight,I caught a sight of a figure writing in front of a desk writing by the light.Undoubtedly,he was enrolled by hard work.Afterwards,the imprint that we should never knock off learning,no matter how old we are ingrained in my mind.
An additional factor involves the recognition that the instruction from parents is a more effective access to knowledge and information for a child.The inability of distinguishing the right from the wrong takes uncall-for steps for a child to understand the truth.What’s worse,some wrong thoughts may be formed in a child’s mind.Therefore parents’ teaching is more effective and efficient.
However,it is very important not to take this assertion too far.The advantages of learning from the society can not be ignored.Only when a child has his/her own acquaintance can he/she comprehend better.
Judging from the evidence offered above,we can arrive at the conclusion that parents are the best teachers and nothing can be the substitute,especially when combined with experiences.

请帮我改一篇TOEFL作文 Do parents serve as the most becoming teachers?Some people hold the opinion that the milieu a child live in can truly learn something from experiences.I concede their sentiment.Nevertheless,from my perspective,children l
Do parents serve as the most becoming teachers? Some people hold the opinion that a child can truly learn most from experiences and environment.I concede their point of view. Nevertheless, from my perspective, children learn more from their parents and parents are the best teachers.
Individually speaking, I learn a lot from my parents and I always think that they are my role models. my father is a good example. When I was a little girl, I consider my father to be the best man in the world and his deeds influence me on every aspect. For instance, my father always emphasized the significance of studying to me and he set an example himself. At the age of 34, after graduating from a university and worked for several years, he prepared to attend an examination to further his education and attain his master degree. Although he hasn’t touched some academic books for years, he did his utmost to study. I will never forget the moment when I wake up in the midnight, I caught a sight of him writing under the lamp. Undoubtedly, he was succeeded. He taught me never giving up studying. Learning is matter of life time.
In addition, children can obtain knowledge and information from parents most directly and effectively. As children are unable to distinguish right from wrong, parents' guidance and discipline can correct their mistakes almost immediately. Therefore, parents are most effective in creating children's awareness for social norm.
However, it is very important not to take this assertion too far. The advantages of learning from the society can not be ignored. Only when a child has his/her own acquaintance can he/she comprehend better.
Judging from the evidence offered above, we can arrive at the conclusion that while it is true that environment can play a part in educating children, parents are still the best teachers as they are close models for children and their teaching is most direct and impactful, especially when combined with experiences.
我大概给你改了下.其实有些时候我看不懂你在写什么.有些语法错误.托福作文力求简洁有效的表达,不要生搬硬套一些词句,因为有些时候不是这样用的.虽然有一定的层次,但是论据不够,论点不够鲜明,结束不够综合也不能紧扣题目.整体上来说,如果撇去看不懂的地方,还算流畅.另外,内容上若是能更有创意较好.老外这样的作文也看多了.别每天都是灯下读书.
另外时态问题我也没大注意,但是很显然有些句子的时态不统一,单数复数后的动词可能也有不 对的地方.这样的错误要不得,属于glaring error 会让老外很郁闷的,因为凸显了基础不扎实的问题.写完要检查,切记~
加油了哦~ 还是很有潜力的~